A.+Venchikova's+essay+(my+comments)

The essay topic Nastya has chosen is rather difficult and controversial for the Russian audience. People indeed often have very strong opinions about it. N. has rightly noted that this issue too is connected with quite a few misconceptions.

What Nastya has submitted as her draft 1 looks more as a freewrite to me and needs a it more lot of revision to make it more persuasive (she has actually noted it in her commentary to her own draft (which I really like as one of ways to move on with the essay revision). Should think about how to incorporate it in my teaching practice in the future.

Other areas for revision:

a) organization b) grammar c) vocabulary d) refences*


 * N has used an example from the Ru media (?) about a case of a lesbian teacher who was made to leave her job after it had been discovered she was lesbian but no refence is provided.


 * Will the girls notice this and point it out to Nastya? **

She has right ly pointed out too that she has no conclusion. I'm curious to see what will the girls make of it?


 * I was really tempted to comment on N's work right away but...

Wow! O **lga has commented on Nastya's essay draft! Nice surprise! Didn't think it'd be so quick. Now wonder if the go deeper into the discussion (which can be one of the questions for the interview in both cases, i.e. if they cpntinue their exchange or stop it where it is, i.e., with one set of comments.